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PostSubject: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 08, 2010 8:07 am

Well...now that I've been inspired to write poetry again, I guess I'll share some with you ^_^

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5. No Bullying
(Whether directed at me or other members, I will have NONE of it.)

Well, now that we've got that covered, here's my first poem of the year:

Waiting

Holding hands,
I take your heart.
But with different lands,
You seem to part.
I stand still,
Doing the task,
Challenging my will,
My face now a mask.

Days go by,
I still hear you,
No matter how long I sigh,
The memories are new.


This is still incomplete, but its what I have so far...

EDIT: I finished! =D But I will leave the old one up so that you can compare...

Waiting

Holding hands,
We take our heart.
But with different lands,
You seem to part.
I stand still,
Doing the task.
Challenging my will,
My face now a mask.

Days go by,
I still hear you.
Longingly I sigh,
The memories new.
How long will it be,
When that day is due,
Till you see me,
And I see you.


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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 08, 2010 3:23 pm

Its very good. I wish I could right like that... Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 08, 2010 5:44 pm

Its very good. Rhyming with so little words is a skill. Keep up the good work ^^
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 08, 2010 7:20 pm

nice work that is a very good poem ^^ i cant wait to see what is next XD

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 08, 2010 8:29 pm

Well will you make the next one??
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 12:03 am

Thanks everybody! Yeah, I usually like to get my point across with few words...

I don't know when I'll make another one, but I know it's soon! ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 12:04 am

OKay. Just keep us updated. ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 12:06 am

Definetly Arceus Cool
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 4:37 am

Have any ideas for the next one??
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 4:43 am

Um...not yet ^^; Please don't spam.
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 4:44 am

Okay. Good luck. Shutting up now.

Dumb 50 second flood I hate you.

Sorry. I don't like flood control.
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 4:46 am

Thank you ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 09, 2010 5:04 am

lol nice arceus LOL XD

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Mon May 10, 2010 2:46 am

Poem #1...Complete!

Hope you guys like it! Surprised
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Thu May 13, 2010 11:38 am

I hope this is okay. Limericks are supposed to be crude.

The Dog

There was a dog who had to poop
Because he ate some bad soup
He sat in the grass
Then licked his own ass
And then he flew the coup.

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Fri May 14, 2010 1:13 am

Vaporinator wrote:
I hope this is okay. Limericks are supposed to be crude.

The Dog

There was a dog who had to poop
Because he ate some bad soup
He sat in the grass
Then licked his own a**
And then he flew the coup.

This should be in the quick poem thread ^^; You can make your own poetry thread and put it there too if you want to. No language please =P
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 15, 2010 6:32 pm

sry...

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sat May 15, 2010 10:07 pm

That's ok ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 16, 2010 2:01 am

its just that limericks are supposed to b crude.

anyway, i hav another.

There once was a lady from Venus,
Who wished that she had...


...seen the look on ur face when i just fooled u! XP

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 16, 2010 4:41 am

...? What?
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 16, 2010 4:57 am

Isn't this suppposed to be in the quick poem thread??

Also, that made no sense.
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 16, 2010 6:42 am

yes please do not spam in others thread if you want to make your own poem put it in the quick poem thread

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 16, 2010 7:34 am

Thanks, Deo. ^_^ I thought vapor was going to do that...but I guess not ^^;
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Sun May 16, 2010 7:41 am

yourwelcome ^^ anytime

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Mon May 17, 2010 12:12 am

nvm, u guys are too young to get the joke there.

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Mon May 17, 2010 12:32 am

No.L wrote:

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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Thu May 20, 2010 6:18 am

I'm back xD I finally wrote some haikus in Art Tuesday =P Now, haikus do not have to be 5,7,5 structure (as I learned on that same day in my japanese class) - just pointing that out.

Here they are:

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

bullets fall down
people scatter
I stand - soaked in the early rain

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

cicadas buzzing
I look at you
we need water

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

staring, staring
no one breathes
laughter fills the room

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

(I've read that haikus are not capitalized - another note)
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Thu May 20, 2010 1:57 pm

I never knew that. I liked them....They were.............um..........Interesting! Smile
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Fri May 21, 2010 1:16 am

Haha, thanks ^_^ I find it fascinating that you can say so much in so few words.
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PostSubject: Re: No.L's Notebook   Fri May 21, 2010 1:18 am

I still find them confusing tho. could you explain them??
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